Speech Marks D.L.O.

Today In writing we were going over what speech marks were. Miss Linker helped us remind and went through all the things to remind us what speech marks are about. Cecillia and I were creating a D.L.O about what speech marks were.

5 Minute Recount - Ana,Victoria and Cecillia

For writing, yesterday our activity today was writing a recount in a group of 3 or 2. In our group was Ana,Victoria and I, we worked so collaboratively that we finished our story. So what we had to do is write a recount story for 5 minutes and every person has to write a paragraph each. Ana,Victoria and I's story is about 3 girls which is us went to camping in the forest and then we made a fire when we woke up the fire was everywhere and then Victoria fell in a large lake and then the Westpac helicopter came and rescued Victoria. Ana and I were stuck in the forest,surrounded with tree's on fire and then Ana had an idea to chuck the sticks at the helicopter.

Provocation

So on this DLO is our Provocation,so what it says is that should "Rio spent $1.2 billion US building new stadiums as hosts of the 2016 Olympics should they have spent this money?" So one the two top boxes it says our opinions. M partner Victoria and I says No because they could use it for fixing broken house or they could use it for the poor people also the kids who don't have education. The two pictures are comparing the stadium,so this stadium is called Panathenaic Stadium so on your left it's when it was the 1870 and it looked horrible but when it came to 2009 it looked very nice and clean. I bet you this year 2016 no one ever uses it and it's full of rubbish.  

Hover Bike - Advertisement

This week we have been learning about advertising ads. So what you see on ads is like 'Do you want to make your friends jealous? and then after that they would show you how to use it. So on this DLO is Ana and I advertisement poster. It shows you the picture of a Hoverbike,It says 'NEW!',It's 30% off,The price,where you can bye it,it has a quote and also the instructions. I like our poster because it pops out and also you can see the title of our poster.   

Advertisements

Advertising the art of convincing people to get them to buy something. Persuasive Language features and memorable images help make you think like they do . 

Today we had get into groups of three or four. In our group was Thomas,Victoria,Evelyn and I. What we had to do was to find a paper and one person had to write all the words that was on the piece of paper and so Evelyn,Victoria and I took turns saying what was on the piece of paper. On the piece of paper it had the meaning of Advertising. It was cool because Victoria,Evelyn,Thomas and I worked has team and came tied with Micaiah's group.

Writing

Today for writing we went to this website. It was about helping us with our writing. First I had to spin the wheel and then it will pick your title so after that when you like your title you can write in a post card,Notebook,Letter or Newspaper. My title is called "write a birthday party invitation for a young movie star who wins the lottery." I choose this because it sounded fun when I finished our postcard then I drewed what goes with my invitation. What I done was some basic stuff. It was fun to this because you get to have fun and also write anything about what your title is about.

Shoe Narrative-Cecillia and Jessie

Shoe Narrative

By Cecillia and Jessie

On  a sunny afternoon, I was abandoned by the fish and chip shop. I was wondering, who will notice me, as people will going pass me I realized that nobody wanted me. I could feel rocky bumps just  coming  towards  me like I was invisible. As  I felt the wind was bursting like a fireball I felt that I was left behind. When I see other shoes like me I just feel so jealous and  I feel like I’m not the only one  who has felt like this before. Has I was by the fish and chip shop I could hear sizzling coming towards  me has if I was hungry and wanted to be like humans that can walk.

As the people come out of the shop I feel like that I have no idea what to do and I just feel like that nobody in the world would want me even if I have holes everywhere. I just wish someone, anyone can just pick me up and take me home somewhere safe.  If someone really does take me home I’ll be the happiest shoe of all time. As the sun set went down I realized that someone came looking for me but he or she came closer I realized it was a dog who wanted to chew me  up and to be his or hers toy. As the dog took me home, the dog showed me his collection of other shoes some of them were like me.

Today for writing we had to write a short story for 15 mins. We had to use the 5 senses and personification to help us point a picture with words. My partner and I Jessie had to write a sentence each  until the 15 mins were done we had to proof read our work.

Structure Information Report

This week for writing we have been learning about Structure Information Report. This DLO is about what a structure information report will need.

Structure Of An Information Report

Identifying the structure of an information report

LI: to understand the structure of information reports

Your challenge: Use the key to help you show the structure of an information report. Highlight the introduction, body paragraphs and conclusion by changing the background colour of the table. Highlight the other structures by using the highlight function.	Key
	Introduction		Body Paragraphs
	Interesting fact (to hook readers in)		Title of body paragraph
	Description of topic		Topic sentence that tells the reader what the paragraph is about
	Tell the reader what the report is about		Special knowledge to help the readers understand
			Conclusion

Blue Whale The blue whale is a type of mammal called a cetacean and is a type of baleen whale. The scientific name for the blue whale is the Balaenoptera muscolus. Blue whales are by far the biggest animals in the world. Even the biggest dinosaur that ever lived doesn't come close in size to the blue whale.

Diet To eat, blue whales filter their food through stiff, bony, comb-like teeth called baleen plates. Their main diet is krill (small creatures that are less than 2 cm in size). A blue whale can eat up to 3,600 kilograms of krill a day during its peak consumption period. Blue whales catch their food by diving down to about 500 meters below the surface.

Habitat Blue whales are found in open oceans from the icy waters of the extreme Southern Hemisphere to the Aleutian Islands off Alaska at the northern boundary of the Pacific Ocean. Summers are spent in polar waters because food production is higher there.

Appearance Blue whales are simply enormous. Their heart is the size of a small car. A blue whale aorta (the main blood vessel) alone is large enough for a human to crawl through. They can weigh over 200,000 kilograms! Female blue whales are generally larger than males. Blue whales are light bluish gray on their dorsal side and mottled gray whitish on their bellies. Some have yellowish bellies.

Endangered species The worldwide blue whale population is not known, however, blue whales are considered endangered according to the U.S. Endangered Species Act. For many years blue whales were hunted extensively for their large quantities of baleen, blubber, and meat. Although blue whales are protected, their populations show few signs of recovery.

Blue whales are large mammals that spends their time in the icy oceans.  They only eat krill and are not a threat to any other creature in the ocean.  Blue whales face the risk of extinction if humans continue to hunt them for their baleen, blubber and meat.

In the week we have been learning to understand the structure of an Information report. What we had to do was highlight the introduction,body paragraph and the conclusion. 

Ariel's Fear

Ariel ran. She turned. Her heart was beating, her hair flew behind her as she ran. She could feel the fear growing inside her. She kept asking herself “Why am I doing this?”     

She reached an old abandoned cottage. She could hear creaks coming towards her. Her heart was racing and her legs continued to shake.“Who’s there!”,”Who’s there!”,”Who’s there!” wondered  Ariel, She slowly turned she saw a little girl holding a teddy bear through a cracked window. She went in. She asked the little girl “Ummmmm excuse me little girl, do you have a family?” The little girl said nothing. She took little steps, one by one. So she had seen the little girl go to the back yard. She walked. She got there, until, suddenly she disappeared.

She still could feel the fear tensing up inside her. She saw a yellow bright  daisy, just popped up out of the ground. She breathed in, slowly. She grabbed it, it pulled her into a deep hole. It was terrifying. It took her to another world that she had never seen before.  Ariel yelled “It’s the future!” But once again that little girl was there, Ariel wanted to help her. She slowly turned around the little girl was right there. The little girl said “I can hear the VOICE! There inside me”.

…..3 weeks later….. She told her family and they said “When those problems happen then just come and  tell us and we will be right with you all the way”, She told everyone at school but everyone didn’t bother listening to her. Her fear was slowly going away, then Fiona came up to her and whispered to her ear “meet me at the cafeteria”. When the bell rang (RingRing RingRing) Fiona told Ariel “I've been there I had fear in me but now I am CONFIDENT and able to make friends”. So they became best friends. But something was coming their way…………...

This term we have been learning to write narratives. We used the picture prompt below to help us imagine how this situation came about. We tried to hook our audience in by thinking about the pace of events and the pictures we painted with words.

Exploring Both Point of view

Today Victoria and I had to do a google draw on the Bus Driver's and the Bus Company's point of view.LS2 learnt that Biaus means one point of view and also we learnt what provocation means strong feelings in someone.And Victoria's role was the Bus Driver and my one was the Bus Company.

Writing

On the street, day time.Legs run along the pavement.They are Mark Renton's Just ahead of him is Spud.They are both belting along.As they travel,various objects,(pens,tapes,CD's,toiletries,ties,sunglasses and so on) either fall or are discarded from inside their jackets.They are pursued by two hard looking store detectives in identical uniforms.The men are fast,but Renton and Spud maintain their lead.Suddenly,as Renton crosses a road,a car skids to a halt,inches from him.In a moment a detachment Renton stops and looks at the shocker driver,then at Spud,who has continued running,then at the two men who are closing in.He smiles.

After he smiled they kept running until they stopped, they realize that they made a big loud noise that went "BANG" the neighbors heard it and then rang the cops.When they stop at a gas station they heard the cops coming the siren went on ,the helicopter was flying round and round in circles.Their plan was to get out of what they done,plan "B" was to fly away and go to Australia, But that didn't happen for them so Renton and Spud had only one idea,that idea was to go in to the police for one year.


This is what we have to do in writing with Miss Anderson,we had to continued the last part of the story. 

Using DRAFT in our writing

LI:To use DRAFT to check our sentences. 

This is the original sentence

why-as the sun rose,she twirled slowly through the forest trying to find her prince charming.  

This is the DRAFT sentence

why-as the sun rose,she twirled slowly through the forest trying to find her prince charming.

Victoria and I try to make up a original sentences after that we tried to stretching our sentences to make it sound better.

Stretching Sentences

Victoria and I display a story that we had to make up so our one was (She danced) so we started of with who and then we went along with the rest of the w's. My partner and I have put our skills to make this sentence powerful.